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A steel mirror opens slowly the junctions, parts fall apart and senses are easily lost.
The apparatus transforms the gas slowly, the optics are blurred and yet...You still live.
If you can still hear my voice,
Tell me how it feels to be mutilated.
The apparatus transforms the gas slowly, the optics are blurred and yet...You still live.
If you can still hear my voice,
Tell me how it feels to be mutilated.
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Lealtad.-
Lealtad. La palabra que muchos olvidaron cuando perdimos la conciencia de ser hermanos de sangre, mente y palabra.
Esclavos de un sistema que no vemos, perdidos como ovejas que siguen el abismo para ver a la muerte mas rapido.
Hoy me identifico mas con la gente ciega por que ellos aprendieron a ver mas alla del sufrimiento y la agonia de un mundo llanamente apacible.
Sueños de papel.-
El orgullo no existe cuando tienes la mirada baja. La misericordia no existe si piensas que todo a tu alrededor es igual de manipulable que un lapiz, una goma y una hoja de papel. Pienso en la necesidad de ver la realidad de otra forma y trat
Literature
Ceteris Paribus
In an eon
You and I will greet the choate moon
Surrounded by her fairy dogs
warrior wolves and magnetic fox tails
who howl some foretelling tune
decoded only by the whistling winds
within my once listless room
I nip your Adam's apple by my Cupid's bow
we are a perfect art, a Sistine Michelangelo
We are stomata of the umpteen,
swimming in each other's dulcet drippings
of halved and pitted French tongues and ears
Let the years pass in this gentle deaf-muteness
where Ceteris Paribus
In this, Hallowed and His Seraphims know
how in the glow of one night tide
the firmament of all
folded into my limitless room
You and I part in sweet sorrow
t
Literature
La fantasma
Es la voz que habla en mi mente,
The voice that talks in my head...
Se enchansa por mis pensamientos,
It expands throughout my thoughts...
Siempre sabe lo qué estoy pensado,
I always know what she's thinking...
I promise you that it is about to get me,
No soy la fantasma - soy ella...
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I'll start off by saying that you wrote this very well, presenting very good imagery to make up for the brief length of the piece. It also sports a very knowledgeable use of vocabulary.
What I dislike the most is either the near overuse of the literary writing technique. The way you word it is embedded in this old literary style that it's almost confusing to read through the first time. "A steel mirror opens slowly the junctions", for example. Another example; "The apparatus transforms the gas slowly".
In all, however, this was thoroughly enjoyable with the image it provides. The length itself is of small concern however; Those who enjoy this the most probably want more than the single image you seem to be painting. I for one was curious as to who was speaking to whom. In all, however, good work.